[Hero Concept] PAPERBOY | Roaming, Speedy, Read All About It! (UPDATE IN COMMENTS)

[Nxt]

This is genius, OP needs to go and redesign with the shoes asap.

let me just start off by saying that i love this concept! a paper boy is such a classic trope that i'm shocked we haven't gotten yet. love the abilities too, although i was confused if the paper trail damaged or debuffed people (probably me just being dumb though).

i agree with dervonnebenaan when they say that it doesn't really feel supernatural or "deadlock"-y enough, but i think there are a few solutions to this without a complete overhaul. i think him being just a paperboy makes him more generic, but what if he was the paperboy? similar to how mcginnis is the inventor for fairfax, and not just an inventor.

to me, he gives off spongebob employee of the month vibes. maybe instead of a generic bike or bag, he could be bestowed magical items as a reward for his outstanding service to the new york oracle (if this part of his story will be changed) or as inherited from the founder of Tulsa Star/this underground newspaper company (which could also be a family business? im just a sucker for family businesses)

for the magical items, instead of a bike he could be given hermes shoes/boots? (below is a poster/advertisement seen ingame)View attachment 98338
to me, i think this would fit him better than the bike, although it might be harder to read if he's in paper trail or bicycle route. as a solution for that maybe in paper trail he'd skip around joyfully but in bicycle route he'd be locked in and full on sprinting (maybe even hovering a little bit because of the shoes/boots?)

and instead of a regular bag, he could have a comedically large santa sack-like "bottomless" (literally or figuratively) bag?
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i think this would learn more into deadlock's supernatural items, such as the hermes shoes, and would also make him more unique than just some paperboy. (it would also give him a really unique silhouette, making him more recognizable when using paper trail and bicycle route)

that's all i've got in my head for now! again i love the concept and sorry for such a lengthy response lmao

 

[leiandroid]

let me just start off by saying that i love this concept! a paper boy is such a classic trope that i'm shocked we haven't gotten yet. love the abilities too, although i was confused if the paper trail damaged or debuffed people (probably me just being dumb though).

i agree with dervonnebenaan when they say that it doesn't really feel supernatural or "deadlock"-y enough, but i think there are a few solutions to this without a complete overhaul. i think him being just a paperboy makes him more generic, but what if he was the paperboy? similar to how mcginnis is the inventor for fairfax, and not just an inventor...

you and dervon have given me such amazing ideas. i LOVE your feedback and input so thank you !!

this has really made me think hard on the concept and how to develop him further in his design and kit to make him fit better into the deadlock world. i'm pretty much settled on what the spells are, but the effects are really where i can inject these ideas more solidly, clearer allied/enemy buffs/debuffs, more "cursed" effects and such.

i'm leaning more towards the tulsa star now. that way i can incorporate star and wing motifs into his design (star badges, wings on his shoes, pins, a glow coming from the tote bag, etc) to really bring home the idea of him being this employee of the month / hermes type hero. i think i can also take a shot at actually designing the bicycle to show that it's a magical bike given to him by his employers with the same motifs applied.

now i really wanna share my other hero ideas i have in the works, maybe i can get some feedback on the things i'm stuck on :'D